...ST2 is giving you hell already. That's a cheerful ominous sign.
*sigh* Yeah. However, ST2 doesn't have an outline yet, so it'll be some time before it goes places. ^^;
Would it work somewhere else in the story, or does it need to be there, in that exact spot? Transition-wise... if I knew what was supposed to be I could give suggestions and plot bunnies (Charlie went off and had children no thanks to some people I could mention, but won't).
Nope. It's definitely specific to that point, but... I don't think it's particularly realistic which is why I'm going "hrmm".
Charlie have sub-plot bunnies sure isn't *my* fault. :P
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cheerfulominous sign.*sigh* Yeah. However, ST2 doesn't have an outline yet, so it'll be some time before it goes places. ^^;
Would it work somewhere else in the story, or does it need to be there, in that exact spot? Transition-wise... if I knew what was supposed to be I could give suggestions and plot bunnies (Charlie went off and had children no thanks to some people I could mention, but won't).
Nope. It's definitely specific to that point, but... I don't think it's particularly realistic which is why I'm going "hrmm".
Charlie have sub-plot bunnies sure isn't *my* fault. :P