...ST2 is giving you hell already. That's a cheerful ominous sign.

Hmm... I like, I want, but I can't see it happening. ^^;; I also need to work on a transition some more in it.

Would it work somewhere else in the story, or does it need to be there, in that exact spot? Transition-wise... if I knew what was supposed to be I could give suggestions and plot bunnies (Charlie went off and had children no thanks to some people I could mention, but won't).